making progress

so for the past week I have been going over my script and editing, and also met with Stacy Bronte and got some excellent suggestions from here. The characters of the parents are being nixed, and I am cutting a number of scenes. The difficult part will be thinking of way to motivate the search for Jerome and events that can occur in relation to that. I also need to make sure i get the importance of the key across soon. Stacy made the great suggestion of Victor being a former student of Jerome, which I am defintitely am going to write in. I was trying to think of some way for them to have a prior relationship but couldn't think of the right one. So, now it's time to keep writing, because there is a lot of stuff that needs to be fixed

I can't believe I wrote that...

So the time has finally come for me to break out the script again and read it over and start the new draft. This is the first time I've read it through from beginning to end, and it was painful. There is a lot of corny dialogue, errors, and also several big contradictions i wrote into the stories that I have to figure out. So the editing process is going to be long and arduous, but it needs to get done. Thanks to a lower class load this term I now have a couple free days per week with chunks of time devoted to screenwriting.

final boss fight Location Found!

Looking around in NYC/Husdon river more and finally found what I was looking for. Governor's Island. Not only that, the Governer's Island National Landmark is a pentagram. Looks like we have the location of the final fight

final boss fights

So in planning out my final fight between Jerome and Braden I was struggling to find a location for it that hasn't been used to death, stuff like the empire state building or central park is out, it's just too clichéd. I am looking at a couple of older historical buildings or churches. I have been toying with the idea of having it take place at some cathedral that was built over a pagan site or native american site. Unfortunately Seeing how this is set in NYC and not Europe finding a church built on a pagan sites is difficult to say the least. I have also been looking at street layouts seeing if I can find a pentagram hidden in them anywhere. No luck so far. In planning out the final battle I have tried planning it out based on different theories of how NYC will be destroyed. First, there is Jerome using the energy siphoned off Merlin's shade and start something like a shock-wave from the urban center of NYC/Manhattan and the destruction spreads from there. That would be an interesting dynamic as it would force the circus performers into the city. The other theory I was toying with was trying to find an element that somehow connects the city, and i came up with water, since plumbing connects everything. Following that theory I looked at different points with lots of water and have came up with a couple of possibilities, mainly different bridges, and one that kept coming up because it's right on the mouth of the Hudson River, Coney Island. I am not sure I can bring myself to set a final magical battle at Coney Island however. So, yeah, that's the latest dilemma with the script